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Ouch
January 1st, 2008, 09:37 PM
Yeah first one to Enter =p

Nerd yay!

It is.... about 763 words >.<

Anyway here it is ... I call It :

The Event Of A Life Time


Skin boats flew across the ebbing sea splashing the veil of the sea mother. A Man sat at the front of a sleek and slender boat the crisp air tossing his dark, long hair about his broad shoulders and thick neck. This man had a smile that would not fall today, along with eyes that seemed to be staring into his thoughts. The skin boats, side by side, began to slow down at the sight of the magnificent beach that then dispersed into the forest, but despite this beautiful scenery, the man still wondered in his own mind until the salty liquid splashed up at his seal clan tattoos. Stepping out of the hand crafted skin boat; the man turned and received a friendly hug from the man that had steered the boat. The forest welcomed them and noises of song birds filled the air on the most important day of that one mans life. From the forest emerged many Willow Clan members and one in particular that called out his name, Vexen. Turning around Vexen’s smile grew bigger as the woman know as Everta ran towards him, her bright blonde hair flicking in the oceans winds, her arms outstretched and ready to embrace the him. Her head lay on his shoulder and his on hers, she whispered these words into his ear as she released her grip; I missed you.
As the day grew on, the evening sky turned pink with soft clouds hovering around it. Vexen and Everta had parted and where getting ready in separate camps on separate parts of the beach. Vexen stepped out of his tent dressed in new clothes especially made for this special event, Breathing out he regained the smile and began walking down to the decided area. A fire was lit and the other seal’s sat around the fire awaiting his arrival. Sitting down the Leader started to tell tales that had happened in the past to men that had taken on this challenge.
The tales earlier that night had worried Vexen so much that he walked out of the circle of Seal’s into the forest. Surprised by this action, a man called xylem went to get up and pursue him however, the Leader pulled him back down telling him with his eyes that it wasn’t the right thing to do. In the forest Vexen had found refuge in a clearing and had begun pacing back and forth mulling the situation over along with the future outcomes. A figure flew from the forest and held him close. For a minute Vexen stood surprised his arms not touching it ,but the shimmering hair that swayed in the night air gave him a clue , so he wrapped his arms round her tightly feeling sure that the problems would not occur.

The next morning was bright and clear, perfect for what would happen later on in the day. The seal clan members where already outside Vexen’s tent waiting for him to appear and when that time came they each in turn took a moment to say good luck, then they began to walk to the place where it would happen.
Everta Stood at the desired place staring out to sea her bright, blue eyes sparkling in the ever moving sun that towered above them, casting shadows across the land. Turning round she looked at all the faces of the willow clan members.
Vexen walked towards Everta but stopped a distance before. The two Clan leaders stepped forwards and began the ritual. Vexen and Everta were called to the middle once the ancient words had been spoken, and then together they sealed it with a Kiss. The Marriage was complete.

On the edge of the Beach the new found couple looked out to sea, hand in hand, at their new home, the seal islands. It was time to leave but was also the hardest part of this occasion because Everta, the young and maybe a little naive willow woman, was leaving her clan for good. For reassurance, Everta looked deep into Vexen's Bold, bright blue eyes then finally said her goodbyes to her old friends. Climbing into the skin boats the seals set off for the new homeland of this brave couple.

Looking back, Everta saw The Willow's waving them goodbye from the shore until the forest disappeared, the Willows were gone.
Turning back around, she hugged Vexen tight pushing the sadness down deep inside her.
The boats disappeared over the horizon, the setting sun taking a last look at the forest. Vexen and Everta; Mate's for life.

rubywolf
January 1st, 2008, 09:44 PM
thats really good! very origional!
well done!!

have a sticker :)

Ouch
January 1st, 2008, 09:47 PM
=D STICKER!!! AHHHHHHHHHHHH !!!!!! IS IT A STAR ?!?!?!?!

Oh and thank you for your nice comment =]

daydreameroboes
January 1st, 2008, 10:28 PM
That's really good! I really like your idea, it's so original.

Good luck!

Ouch
January 2nd, 2008, 05:41 PM
Thanks daydream ^^ Good luck to you too!

Lighting Wolf
January 6th, 2008, 02:58 AM
wow that was great

flameboy
January 15th, 2008, 05:38 PM
Aww! How could you?!? You just did a better story than my one by about 867%. :Falls to the floor and cries uncontrollably: (only joking of course)

wolfrepublic
January 17th, 2008, 09:23 AM
AH! that is great, its very original, i don't stand a chance now :(

Ouch
January 18th, 2008, 10:38 PM
heh heh you still have a chance =]

corlupa
January 19th, 2008, 02:50 AM
oh you win you beat me mine is sad and i wasn't really in to but yours is good you have a great chance

Ouch
January 19th, 2008, 02:54 AM
nah i wont win im not as good as some of the other people on here =p

You have as much of a chance as i do =]

If someone guessed it was a marriage at the beggining it would ruin it a bit so yeah

Wolffang
January 19th, 2008, 04:11 AM
That was a great story! I hope you win!

Ouch
January 19th, 2008, 04:48 PM
Thanks Wolffang ^^

I doubt ill win but oh well , it's fun to take part =]

corlupa
January 19th, 2008, 05:46 PM
nah i wont win im not as good as some of the other people on here =p

You have as much of a chance as i do =]

If someone guessed it was a marriage at the beggining it would ruin it a bit so yeah

Are you kidding yours was great (seriously read mine ahem...)

Are you sure Blendy din't blend to gether some short Michelle paver stories fore you :sly:
>.>
<.<

Ouch
January 20th, 2008, 03:36 AM
x] nah i did this by myself.

Im not going to win >.^

trust me =]

MidnightSWolf
January 20th, 2008, 12:34 PM
Your story was good. I liked it. I hope I don't sound like I'm critisizing or anything, but you should proof read your story. You missed out a lot of commas(,), and there were some spelling errors. Otherwise, it was good. Sorry, but vocab and punctuation is very important to me. Good luck in the competition!

Ouch
January 20th, 2008, 01:23 PM
Meh , i changed the punctuation best i could .

MidnightSWolf
January 20th, 2008, 01:37 PM
:thumb: I understand it better now!

Ouch
January 23rd, 2008, 02:57 PM
Heh , thanks for telling me Midnight .

Might help towards making it better =]

MidnightSWolf
January 24th, 2008, 03:24 AM
I'm no psychic like Akhlut, so I can't predict if you'll win. Why not ask him? :D

Ouch
January 24th, 2008, 06:19 PM
akky's a girl btw ;)

nah i know what the outcome is ...

well not really but i know im not the winner ... [insert name here ] will win =]

corlupa
January 26th, 2008, 07:21 PM
x] nah i did this by myself.

Im not going to win >.^

trust me =]

okay if that what you think you haven't been peeking in the mod forums have you >.> <.< I get a little suspicious of you sometime AOWTW lolz

Ouch
January 26th, 2008, 08:20 PM
xD

dam it your on to me

* grabs to secret research files and flees to the hills!*

To the shire!

Tinuviel
January 26th, 2008, 09:08 PM
Haha, the LoTRsyness has rubbed off on you, Ouch :P

I never really look at the competition entries, but I will from now on. Yours is so sweet :) the end is a bit sad though :(

Ouch
January 26th, 2008, 09:12 PM
tyoo tin o' beanies

i forgot to mention they all get eaten by whales ^^

only joking...

Tinuviel
January 26th, 2008, 09:16 PM
That's nice...I don't know why you don't think it'll win *or have they already been judged? I'll check*

Ouch
January 26th, 2008, 09:39 PM
nope it announces winner on 1st

it ends tonight [midnight]


i just dont want to get my hopes up if yar get what i mean ...

:psst:

MidnightSWolf
January 27th, 2008, 01:25 AM
okay if that what you think you haven't been peeking in the mod forums have you >.> <.< I get a little suspicious of you sometime AOWTW lolz

And how, pray tell, did you manage to peek into the mod forums, hmm?

corlupa
January 27th, 2008, 02:04 AM
xD

dam it your on to me

* grabs to secret research files and flees to the hills!*

To the shire!

Ha! after him Evil Monkey and grab Sauraman (sp?) he will aid you in your quest

*******Meanwhile******

Corlupa: Ouch may I see those files please please

Ouch
January 27th, 2008, 02:20 AM
ive been researshing Akhult in her natural habbitat.

this is my research . *slides over folder*

achem this meeting never happened. * pulls up collar and walks away*

MidnightSWolf
January 27th, 2008, 05:57 AM
Quick! Duplicate that file and distribute it. It's a scientific breakthrough!