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Great wolf in the sky
September 5th, 2007, 09:33 PM
Calling of the guardians

The World spirit looked over the vast earth before him.The humans were fighting again,and this time,he feared that there would not be an end to it.The end would only come when the lay crimson and strewn with bodies.Already the forests were littered with so many bodies,it was as if a giant child had left their toys throughout the green of the leaves.The world spirit sighed.He was getting far too old for this.Already he had seen men come and fall,and it seemed as it would continue forever,until eventually there was no one left.The world moved on,and the people moved with it,forgetting the mistakes of the past,simply replaying them over and over again.The time had come for the World spirit to step in,and stop the destruction.There was a problem though,The World Spirit did not know what to do.And then he saw the answer.Amongst the dead,picking over the spoils of the humans rampage,there was a single raven,picking at the eye of a fallen human.That was the answer.The raven had shown The world Spirit the only way to stop the carnage.

The animals of the forest were assembled before The World Spirit,all confused as to why they had been called here,to The First Tree.They had been told that they were here to help stop the blood shed that the humans were causing,but they did not know how coming here would help them end it.Then The World Spirit did something unprecidented in the history of the earth.He called the spirits of those dead back.He turned to them,and spoke in their minds,for to hear The World's Spirit's true voice,was to go mad.He spoke in the animals minds as well,and this is what the assembled dead,and the animals of the earth heard:

"My friends,both dead and alive,from the forest and the oceans,from the mountains and the frozen north,the time has come for the blood letting to cease for good.For too long have I sat by and let your kind,"he waved and arm at the dead,"destroy all that I have made for them.Too long have they fought amongst themselves,and for what?How many of you can truly say that you are happy with the way you lived your lives?Who among you can say that you are happy with the lives that your descendants are living?Who among you would,if given a chance,change the world so that your descendants could live better,more peace filled lives?"He looked at the faces of the long dead,eyes sunken in their sockets and the skin rotting on their bones.He could see the contempt in their eyes,the oppossal to his plan.But among some of them,he could see that his words had reached them.He could see that now they would be willing to go where he led.

He turned on the animals now."And who among you has not felt the destruction of your homes by these humans?Who among you has not had a brother or friend killed so that the humans could fashion more weapons?Who among you can truly say that you are happy with the state of the world?Who among you can say that you enjoy being hunted?Who among you can say that you are happy to lay down your lives so that the humans can play their games of life and death?Who among you wishes to change all that is the current,and create a bright shining future?"The World Spirit could see,that just like the dead,the animals were divided.Some believed that there could not be any change,while others knew that,with help,there could be a change.The time had come to show them what they would have to do to change.

"All of those who would change the world for their descendants,for the good of their descandents,and for the good of their souls,step forward and join my ranks."He looked expactantly at the rows and rows of dead,and for a long time,no one moved,until eventually,a young boy stepped forward.The courage of the young boy seemed to shame the rest of the dead.The World Spirit saw many that had seemed to opposse his plan hang their heads,and step forward to join the ranks.Eventually there were only a few left in the original group.He called out to them,"Are you to be the only ones to stand against my plan?Are you to be the few that will regret not joining when the rest have joined and are putting you to shame?Are you weaker than this young boy?"The World Spirit had hoisted the young boy up onto his shoulders,so that he would not be lost in the crowd,and he had been a symbol to the dead.That one boys courage had shown the rest of the dead how couragous they could be.But the remaining dead seemed to need something more to bring their courage to the fore front.So he called out to them again,saying,"You shall be returned to earth if you join my ranks."This brought shock to their faces,and they quickly joined.

The World Spirit turned to the animals now.This was the crucial part of his plan,it could not be done without them.He called out to them,"Friends,I cannot do this without you.It may have been possible without the dead,but without you,my plan will surely fail.Who among you will join us?"Like the dead,they were reluctant to join,but finally there stood the dead and the animals together,with only one group of animals who had not joined.He looked at them,then called out,"You have chosen not to join.You have shown the cowardice in your nature.For that,you shall forever more run from others.You shall run from the animals who joined,and from the humans.You shall be forever hunted,and shame be on your heads for not having the courage to join.You are banished to earth."He waved his hand,and they were gone.

He turned to the ranks of dead and animals."Thank you my friends for joining.You shall now know my plan.You shall become guardians for the people.You shall watch over them,and stop this bloodshed.This is why you have joined."

The animals and dead were joined,and created the guardians.They went forth and created clans for the humans.That is the story of the beginning.

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And thats it ladies and gentlemen.It's 999 words not including the title.It was originally suppossed to have been much more violent,and the clan guardians were actually cursed into helping and they were blood thirsty and thats why you had to give them a slice of the meat from a kill etc etc,but it got toned down a lot in the end up.Sorry to anyone who prefers the original story line :S

biki
September 6th, 2007, 08:35 PM
o_0 ..........thats really good.....(P.S can i read a copy of the bloodier one?) XD

ravengirlforlife
September 6th, 2007, 08:36 PM
Thats amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Great wolf in the sky
September 6th, 2007, 08:37 PM
Wow I didn't expect to get an amazing :D and if you guys want,I will type out the other version with the blood and sacrafices etc etc,but i dont think i can enter it into the competition as i dont think multiple entries are allowed

biki
September 6th, 2007, 08:38 PM
Hehe violent version =D tis good originally too =) like the idea of the war/fighting =D

Great wolf in the sky
September 6th, 2007, 08:40 PM
I can't actually remember why I came up with the idea of all the clans fighting though.See my original story,the one with the blood and guts,is based on a story from norse mythology...or some mythology anyway.But that one just came out of no where last night 0.o

Sparrow
September 6th, 2007, 08:43 PM
o_O...........MY EYES BUUUUUUURN!! YOU'RE TOO GOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Great wolf in the sky
September 6th, 2007, 08:49 PM
Ah come on,its not that good sparrow

Sparrow
September 6th, 2007, 08:56 PM
Well its ALOT better than what I wrote!

Great wolf in the sky
September 6th, 2007, 09:00 PM
Ah well,I just am suppossed to be really good at writing stories,and if there wasnt a word limit,it would have went on a bit more than it did.As it is,I had it done,and then counted it up and found it was just a few words over so i asked wolfbrother about it,she didnt know,and i asked if it was okay to be just a bit over by a few words,but she didnt get back to me so i cut it down,which was very hard,and then after i spend ages trying to cut it down,i get her pm saying a few words over is fine ¬_¬

Sparrow
September 6th, 2007, 09:01 PM
^ Aww poor you X3

Great wolf in the sky
September 6th, 2007, 09:22 PM
Ah well it all worked out.And if you guys put up enough demand for it,I'll try and enter the other version of this story that is all blood guts and gore etc etc

Sparrow
September 6th, 2007, 09:30 PM
Yay For Blood Guts And Gore!!

Great wolf in the sky
September 6th, 2007, 09:38 PM
Well,thats one vote for blood and guts then.But just to keep this thread clean and not get it spammed on,please send me your vote for blood guts etc in a pm.All praise etc is welcome on this thread,but just to stop my story being lost in the posts for blood guts,send me a pm instead.Thanks :D

Blackwolf
September 7th, 2007, 10:57 AM
Lol. That's really good G wolf. Anothe vote for bloods and guts. We've not insane honestly we've not. ;)

Great wolf in the sky
September 7th, 2007, 03:12 PM
Okay so currently its at three votes for blood and guts,so ill type it up sometime over the weekend as my brain hurts too much tonight so look out for it over the next few days

Nigilynog
September 7th, 2007, 03:58 PM
Good work GWolf. I'm personally all for a bit of blood and gore. Just remember two things. This is a website for children, so please not to make it too unpleasant. The other thing is that you've got to understand that although multiple entries would be great, us Guardians have to find the time to read through every one and then decide who's won - that's not easy, especially as we all have busy lives. I'm not trying to tell you off but please don't get the impression that you can just take a vote to change the rules, because it might be great for you but not so much for us. Sorry if this sounds weird, it's just that we've got a lot of entries to get through as it is.

-Nigilynog
Clan Guardian

Great wolf in the sky
September 7th, 2007, 04:04 PM
No i didnt mean to enter the second story,or the original,whichever way you look at it.I was just planning on typing the other one up for the enjoyment of doing it,and so that people could read it.I didnt mean that I was going to enter both of them.And its not to be too violent you say...?Nah I'm only kidding,its not going to be serious gore and stuff,just think....erm...well it wont be too violent,but it will be darker than the story i posted on here.Put it this way,it wont go beyond the blood and guts featured in the final harry potter book.

It's just that the story i posted here wasn't really the story that i had originally thought of,so i was going to show the clanners the original as well,but simply not enter it into the competition.Anyway,the worst that will happen in the gory version will be an alternative explanation to why the clans give a bit of meat etc to the clan guardians.The clan guardians werent as nice back in the beginning as they are now,lets put it like that,but it wont be extremely violent,as i dont really like writing extremem violence,and i understand that this is a family friendly site :D

Nigilynog
September 7th, 2007, 05:05 PM
Ah that's alright then. I wasn't trying to stop you from posting it by mentioning how gory it gets, just a reminder really. Personally I'd probably enjoy it if it was violent and a lot darker, but the Clan's the Clan, gotta keep these sort of things in mind.

-Nigilynog
Clan Guardian

Great wolf in the sky
September 7th, 2007, 05:09 PM
Yea i know what you mean*sighs*ah well,ill post it with warnings etc just in case it is a little too violent for the younger clanners

Cajomo
September 9th, 2007, 02:02 PM
Oooh me likey! How could you have wrote a bloodier one? lol this one is pretty gory!

Great wolf in the sky
September 9th, 2007, 02:13 PM
Oh believe me,I can write much much gorier stuff than that.Although how I'm actually going to write a story of that length I'm not too sure as I cant get beyond the idea of what I'm going to do,so i may have to simply the main plot line or whatever you want to call it

Blackwolf
September 9th, 2007, 05:03 PM
Oh well. Your think of something i' sure.

Great wolf in the sky
September 16th, 2007, 02:17 PM
Okay,I can't think up a good story for this,so I'll just tell you what I was thinking of doing.If anyone wants to take this story and use it,pm me please to ask for my permission.However if more than one person wants to use it,I am not allowing this to be entered into the competition.If more than one person wishes to use this idea,then you can only use it to write a story with and please post your results on the clan,because I would really like to see your ideas on how this story and how you developed it.

Okay,the basic idea of the blood and guts storyline was that,at the beginning,the Clan guardians were not actually friends to the people as they are now.They looked over the clans,and watched them,but only at a price.The price was,that once every three months,one of the clan's children had to be sacraficed to each of the guardians.In return,the guardians would watch and protect the clans for the next three moons.I'm not exactly too sure what happened to change all this,but I'm starting to think that maybe the clans made a pact amongst themselves,and went to war with the guardians,or simply just refused to sacrfice their children any more,which eventually starved the guardians and made them weak.They conceeded to the clans,and now are only offered a small part of the prey,which can be seen to happen in the books and our rps.

So what do you think of the original idea?Again,If you want to use this,pm me asking for permission.However keep in mind that only one person is allowed to use this to enter the competition with,although the mods might not allow you,so I'll ask them if it okay as well.But I would really like to see people taking up on this idea,as I would like to see how different people write the story,and what they change.Bear in mind that if you do write a story with this,you do not have to keep what I have said and do it as I have said it would have been done.You can chop and change to suit yourselves.In fact I would prefer it if you did,as I would like to see how different people write the same story.Good luck :D

biki
September 16th, 2007, 02:21 PM
Wow, tis a good storyline. XD

Great wolf in the sky
September 16th, 2007, 02:23 PM
Thanks,I wish I could actually think of how I could write it,but unfortunatly I can't so i have opened it out to others.Think of it as a mini competiition run by me...but you dont get any prize unfortunatly,just praise for your story :P

Great wolf in the sky
September 17th, 2007, 04:39 PM
Okay,sorry for the double post,but I just asked scar if its okay for someone else to use my idea to enter the comp,and she said yes.So like i said,if you want to use it in the comp,please make sure you pm me before you post it.Thanks :D

Solo Wolf
September 17th, 2007, 06:38 PM
I asked the aforementioned gwolf and he said I could use it, so claimed, :D
Beware of my posteh in the next week.

Great wolf in the sky
September 17th, 2007, 06:51 PM
Yep,she owns the rights to the bloody version of the beginning now :D Although I would still like to see how other people write it,but you cant enter this idea into the competition anymore sorry guys.Solo wolf is the only person allowed to use that idea for the purposes of the competition,but feel free to post this idea in clan art,but you have to write it in your own words or i get in troubles :S

Solo Wolf
September 17th, 2007, 07:30 PM
I just started it and its very angsty...

Great wolf in the sky
September 18th, 2007, 07:47 PM
Yea I have had a few sneak peaks at the story and all I can say is...wow...wow...Well me thinks im out of the running now :P

CamWolf
October 21st, 2007, 02:17 PM
coooooooooool

Spirit Wanderer
October 23rd, 2007, 01:22 PM
That's just woah. Basically woah. :D