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Sparrow
September 3rd, 2007, 04:02 PM
Here is my entry for the writing competition.


Guardians of the forest~

The World Spirit watched from his mountain. All was well with the world he created. The forest was lush, full of life and greenery and so the people of the forest were happy. The sea was peaceful and all manners of sea creatures lived amongst the waves and so the people of the sea were happy.
The far north was covered in a thick blanket of snow yet the prey was plentiful and so the people of the far north were happy ….Yet…The World Spirit could not help but think that something was missing. The Great Spirit had no one to guard his wonderful creation!
And so he began to think. He looked down upon the forest and sea from his high abode and suddenly thoughts of his guardians filled his mind.
He saw the brave wolf, holding a rabbit in his jaws, wandering through the forest, proud and free. He saw the wolf put down his prize, lift his muzzle up high and howl a glorious song to his pack about a good catch.
He saw the wise raven, flying upon the wind, her ebony feathers, as black as night, catching the breeze. He saw her land down in her nest with food to feed two plump, feathery chicks.
In a river, he could see the happy otter playfully sliding down a small slope on his belly before landing with a small splash in the calm, gentle water.
He saw all the trees and all the animals in the forest and he smiled to himself.
In the sea, The Nanuak saw two graceful leopard seals chasing each other happily through the blue, blue waves.
Wheeling in the sky was the majestic sea eagle, its wings spread out, letting it ride on the wind current.
Again he smiled to himself.
In the cold far north he saw a cunning white fox, stalking through the snow and perfectly blending into its surroundings.
Now the World Spirit knew, he just knew, who would guard the beautiful land for him while he wasn’t there.
And so the World Spirit shut his eyes and chanted these words….

“Brave wolf in the forest who howls through the forest
And runs free and wild.
Wise raven who catches the winds
And flies gracefully in the sky.
Happy otter who plays in the river
And frolics in the water.
Graceful seal who rides swims through waves
And splashes in the sea.
Majestic eagle who rides the air
And glides above.
Cunning fox who stalks its prey
And hides in the white snow.
All of you!
Hear my cry!
Look after my land.
Look after my people.
Look after the earth
And the water
And the air
And the ice!
Guardians of the land, the sea, the ice
And of the people! “

The wolf, raven, otter, seal, eagle and fox sounded their replies back to the World Spirit and he smiled and said-

Thank you…

And to the people, he whispered on the wind-

May your clan guardian
Stay with you.
Always....

After scraping my old entry, I came up with this.
508 words altogether INCLUDING the title.

ravengirlforlife
September 3rd, 2007, 04:05 PM
Thats really good!!

Cajomo
September 3rd, 2007, 04:07 PM
Oooh, very uniqe! me likey!

Sparrow
September 3rd, 2007, 04:40 PM
:P....Thanks...It'll be very strange if I win with this X3

ShadowWolfGirl
September 3rd, 2007, 09:58 PM
Good Good! I like it! very good.

Bird Of Prey
September 4th, 2007, 08:47 AM
Cool poem!

Sparrow
September 4th, 2007, 10:32 AM
even though it doesn't really sound like one? heh T.Y

Bird Of Prey
September 4th, 2007, 10:34 AM
It sounds like one to me. a poem doesn't need to rhyme.

Sparrow
September 4th, 2007, 10:35 AM
...good point :P

Blackwolf
September 4th, 2007, 10:42 AM
Well done Sparrow. I always write poems that don't rythum

firen
September 4th, 2007, 11:11 AM
It sounds like a spell or a chant! Very good!

biki
September 5th, 2007, 08:33 PM
i like it =D

Sparrow
September 6th, 2007, 04:46 PM
X3 I missed out the g in writing XD ..Thanks..But judging from all the entries...Mine completely sucks XP

Blackwolf
September 10th, 2007, 01:56 PM
I liked your old entry but this one is better.